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The bar chart illustrates the hours of young generation spent on seven activities each week between 2002 and 2007.

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The bar chart illustrates the hours of young generation spent on seven activities each week between 2002 and 2007. Overall, it is evident that watching television was the most popular activity over this period while bowling was the least attractive one. Going to pubs and discos, watching TV and shopping all have shown an increased number of hours adolescents spent on the activity except watching DVDs which was fluctuated. In the year 2002 teenagers spent 25 hours watching television which rose moderately and reached a high level of itself in 2007 which was about 40 hours. Going to pubs and discos have had the same procedure as shopping which was an increased pattern from over 5 hours to over 15 and from above 5 to precisely 15 hours respectively during the period given. On the other hand, doing homework was dropped from over 10 hours to just over 5 hours. Playing sport fell more dramatically from 10 hours to around 3 hours and bowling also decreased gradually from under 5 hours to about 4 hours during 2002 to 2007.
The bar chart illustrates the
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of young generation spent on seven activities each week between 2002 and 2007.

Overall
, it is evident that watching television was the most popular activity
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over
this period while bowling was the least attractive one. Going to pubs and discos, watching TV and shopping all have shown an increased number of
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hours
adolescents spent on the activity except watching DVDs which
was fluctuated
.

In the year 2002
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teenagers
spent 25
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hours
watching television which rose
moderately
and reached a high level of itself in 2007 which was about 40
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hours
. Going to pubs and discos have had the same procedure as shopping which was an increased pattern from
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over
5
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hours
to
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over
15 and from above 5 to
precisely
15
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hours
respectively
during the period
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given
.

On the other hand
, doing homework
was dropped
from
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over
10
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hours
to
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just
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over
5
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. Playing sport fell more
dramatically
from 10
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hours
to around 3
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and bowling
also
decreased
gradually
from under 5
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hours
to about 4
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hours
during 2002 to 2007.

IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the hours of young generation spent on seven activities each week between 2002 and 2007.

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