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The diagrams illustrate the changes that were made to the city park prior to and following construction of the swimming pool.

The diagrams illustrate the changes that were made to the city park prior to and following construction of the swimming pool. jobLa
The diagrams illustrate the changes that were made to the city park prior to and following construction of the swimming pool. The park has changed slightly despite the fact that most of the areas remained the same. Looking at the diagram before construction in more detail, we can see that the park road was located in the middle of the park when entering the entrance. On the left side of the road, there was a spacious parking lot. The two basketball courts separately stood next to the parking area. Across the road from the basketball areas was a garden where a fountain could be seen. Another parking lot existed beside the garden which was also on the other side of the first parking lot. After the construction was done, a pool replaced the second parking area. The garden remained in the same place but the fountain was removed in it. A basketball court by the road became a new parking lot when another court still existed next to it. The large parking lot and the park road have changed nothing as before.
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park
prior to and following construction of the swimming pool. The
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remained the same.

Looking at the diagram
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construction in more detail, we can
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see
that the
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park
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road
was located
in the middle of the
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park
when entering the entrance. On the
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left
side of the
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road
, there was a spacious
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parking
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lot
. The two basketball courts
separately
stood
next
to the
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parking
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area
. Across the
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road
from the basketball
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areas
was a garden where a fountain could be
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seen
. Another
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parking
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lot
existed beside the garden which was
also
on the other side of the
first
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parking
lot.

After the construction
was done
, a pool replaced the second
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parking
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area
. The garden remained in the same place
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but
the fountain
was removed
in it. A basketball court by the
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road
became a new
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parking
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lot
when another court
still
existed
next
to it. The large
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parking
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lot
and the
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park
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road
have
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changed
nothing as
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before
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IELTS academic The diagrams illustrate the changes that were made to the city park prior to and following construction of the swimming pool.

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