Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Schooling years and qualifications

Schooling years and qualifications 25aOb
The bar chart illustrates the average number of years devoted for formal education by male and female candidates. Additionally, two pie chart shows the comparison of different kind of formal education that was completed by students in year 2000 and 2010 To begin with, the first bar graph gives the impression that the average number of years of schooling for adult male gradually increased from 8. 5 years to 10 years. Moreover, adult males spent more years at school as compared to adult females. However, there was a marginal increase in the average number of years spent by adult females at school. With regards to people's approach towards the various levels of formal education, the information is summarised in two different pie charts. According to this chart, there was a drastic increase in people attending masters qualification and university qualification. Earlier in 2000, merely 7. 5% of the people did enroll for masters qualification which dramatically jumped to 30. 23% by the year 2010. Similar trend can be noticed for university qualifications. However, the proportion of people having formal school education declined continuously by 2010. primary, secondary and high school qualification shrunk to 2. 1%, 13. 2% and 2. 1% respectively over the period.
The bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
illustrates the average number of years devoted for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
formal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
by male and female candidates.
Additionally
, two pie
Possible agreement error. The noun 'chart' seems to be countable, so consider using: "charts".
chart
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the comparison of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
formal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
that
was completed
by students in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
2000 and 2010

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, the
first
bar graph gives the impression that the average number of years of schooling for adult male
gradually
increased from 8. 5 years to 10 years.
Moreover
, adult males spent more years at school as compared to adult females.
However
, there was a marginal increase in the average number of years spent by adult females at school.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's approach towards the various levels of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
formal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
, the information is
Possible spelling mistake. 'summarised' is British English.
summarised
in two
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
. According to this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
, there was a drastic increase in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
attending masters
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
qualification
and university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
qualification
. Earlier in 2000,
merely
7. 5% of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
did enroll for masters
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
qualification
which
dramatically
jumped to 30. 23% by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
2010. Similar trend can
be noticed
for university qualifications.

However
, the proportion of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
having
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
formal
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
declined
continuously
by 2010.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
primary
, secondary and high school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
qualification
shrunk to 2. 1%, 13. 2% and 2. 1%
respectively
over the period.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic Schooling years and qualifications

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6band
    The provided graph gives information about the proportion of young undergraduates in 4 various nations, in the period from 2000 to 2010.
    The provided graph gives information about the proportion of young undergraduates in 4 various nations, in the period from 2000 to 2010. Overall, country A and D underwent a steady upward trend during studied time while the figure of two remaining brackets were almost unvolatile. It is also obvious...
  • 6band
    the amount of foreign pupils at the college on the south of england
    The chart illustrates the amount of foreign pupils at the college which is located on the south of England. It is immediately apparent that the student from Sweden is the highest among others, whereas Syria is the lowest. The amount of students from Germany and France are equal Most female students...
  • 6band
    Different Purposes of water usage around the world
    The pie charts show how much water is used for different purposes in 6 areas of the world. From this chart, it is shown that the amount of water used in 6 different areas of the world are compared for 3 main purposes: industrial use, agricultural use and domestic use. Regarding the industrial use, E...
  • 5.5band
    the maps give information about changes in the town in 1980 and 2005
    the maps show changes which occurred between 1980 and 2005. It is evident that a lot of trees were cut down and two storey houses were converted into multi-storey buildings. To begin with, at the beginning of the period the town was a much greener residential area with a large number of trees and in...
  • 6.5band
    The chart show the adults and offspring earning in 1989.
    The provided table charts illustrate about adults and offspring earning, which is spent on four various items in the UK. The information is given for 1989. Units are measured in percentages. Overall, it is seen that, the maximum money spent by girls. In contrast, the least amount was spent by women...
  • 6band
    The charts compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001
    The two stacked bar charts detail the UK’s household demographics in 1981 and 2001. The initial impression from the chart is that 1-person and 2-person households were the second most and the most common family classifications in both given years, and they also experienced rises in percentages. The ...