Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The provided graph gives information about the proportion of young undergraduates in 4 various nations, in the period from 2000 to 2010.

The provided graph gives information about the proportion of young undergraduates in 4 various nations, in the period from 2000 to 2010. rL6ok
The provided graph gives information about the proportion of young undergraduates in 4 various nations, in the period from 2000 to 2010. Overall, country A and D underwent a steady upward trend during studied time while the figure of two remaining brackets were almost unvolatile. It is also obviously seen that the percentage of people attending tertiary education in country D was the highest when compared with other sectors. In 2000, there was roughly 2 fifths of undergraduates in country A. The figure is accompanied by an increase to about 10% before reaching its peak of 58% in the year of 2010. A similar pattern can be observed in country D although its university attending rate was considerably higher than that in country A, at 60%. Ten years later, there was a marked rocket by 20% in the proportion of undergraduates which followed a slight climb to approximately 63% in 2005. Moving to the other 2 countries, it can be easily witnessed that both of their figure didn’t experience lots of change, fluctuating around 40% for country B and 52% for country C. However, there was a clear difference between the proportion of young people in higher education in 2 countries which reveals that the undergraduate rate of country B was the lowest during the researched time, with a gap of more than 10% in comparison with country C.
The provided graph gives information about the proportion of young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
undergraduates
in 4 various nations, in the period from 2000 to 2010.

Overall
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
A and D underwent a steady upward trend during studied time while the figure of two remaining brackets were almost
Possible spelling mistake found.
unvolatile
. It is
also
obviously
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that the percentage of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
attending tertiary education in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
D was the highest when compared with other sectors.

In 2000, there was roughly 2 fifths of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
undergraduates
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
A. The figure
is accompanied
by an increase to about 10%
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
reaching its peak of 58% in the year of 2010. A similar pattern can
be observed
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
D although its university attending rate was
considerably
higher than that in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
A, at 60%. Ten years later, there was a marked rocket by 20% in the proportion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
undergraduates
which followed a slight climb to approximately 63% in 2005.

Moving to the other 2
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
, it can be
easily
witnessed that both of their figure didn’t experience lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
, fluctuating around 40% for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
B and 52% for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
C.
However
, there was a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
difference between the proportion of young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in higher education in 2
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
which reveals that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
undergraduate
rate of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
B was the lowest during the researched time, with a gap of more than 10%
in comparison
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
C.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The provided graph gives information about the proportion of young undergraduates in 4 various nations, in the period from 2000 to 2010.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6band
    the amount of foreign pupils at the college on the south of england
    The chart illustrates the amount of foreign pupils at the college which is located on the south of England. It is immediately apparent that the student from Sweden is the highest among others, whereas Syria is the lowest. The amount of students from Germany and France are equal Most female students...
  • 6band
    Different Purposes of water usage around the world
    The pie charts show how much water is used for different purposes in 6 areas of the world. From this chart, it is shown that the amount of water used in 6 different areas of the world are compared for 3 main purposes: industrial use, agricultural use and domestic use. Regarding the industrial use, E...
  • 5.5band
    the maps give information about changes in the town in 1980 and 2005
    the maps show changes which occurred between 1980 and 2005. It is evident that a lot of trees were cut down and two storey houses were converted into multi-storey buildings. To begin with, at the beginning of the period the town was a much greener residential area with a large number of trees and in...
  • 6.5band
    The chart show the adults and offspring earning in 1989.
    The provided table charts illustrate about adults and offspring earning, which is spent on four various items in the UK. The information is given for 1989. Units are measured in percentages. Overall, it is seen that, the maximum money spent by girls. In contrast, the least amount was spent by women...
  • 6band
    The charts compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001
    The two stacked bar charts detail the UK’s household demographics in 1981 and 2001. The initial impression from the chart is that 1-person and 2-person households were the second most and the most common family classifications in both given years, and they also experienced rises in percentages. The ...
  • 5.5band
    USA number of farms and farm workers in 1910 from 2000
    The graph shows the number of farms and farm workers in the USA between 1910 and 1920 Overall, as can be seen from the graph is that there was a huge drop in the number of workers and farms over the years The biggest change was in the number of farm workers in 1910 there were almost 14 million far...