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The diagrams below shows the three min structures and improvement in each cooking equipment years ago.

The diagrams below shows the three min structures and improvement in each cooking equipment years ago. APNmn
The pictorial diagram indicates the three manmade devices which illustrate in three categories. This natural process has been running about 1000 years ago. To begin with, the first fire device was a pot which was maintained with three grass and some stones. It gives some stability to the pot. After that, the second cooking equipment was made by the clay shield's second cooking utensils. It was covered with all-natural materials such as stones and thick branches. The clay shield protected it and gave support to the fire from the wind. This material is made with only clay. In the second utensils of the cooking device, some general parts of the device were improved. On the other hand, the third cooking equipment device has improved with several tools. This new device is made with an outer layer of metal and an inner layer made with clay lining. This new device is called ''cooker''. It has a small door to the outside of the metal. Inside of the clay lining. There is a great for charcoal used from the fuel and also it helps to protect fuel drops from the people and around the air. This fire lights device has three supporters to support fo spot and provide such stability to the firelight. Furthermore, the handle can help to transfer easily to other places. The small door line for air removed several ashes which have come out from the cooker. The fir is enclosed by metal which helps to protect and give more efficiency to the pot. This development of cooking devices has seen more improvement compared with the beginning of the old generation. Overall, the fire materials and fuels have a more significant device to operate the devices. The generation of people improving more and more ideas about cooking equipment.
The pictorial diagram indicates the three
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manmade
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devices
which illustrate in three categories. This natural process has been running about 1000 years ago. To
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begin
with, the
first
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fire
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device
was a pot which
was maintained
with three grass and
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some
stones. It gives
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some
stability to the pot. After that, the second cooking equipment
was made
by the
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clay
shield's second cooking utensils. It
was covered
with all-natural materials such as stones and thick branches. The
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clay
shield protected it and gave support to the
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fire
from the wind. This material
is made
with
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only
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clay
. In the second utensils of the cooking
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device
,
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some
general parts of the
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device
were
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improved
.
On the other hand
, the third cooking equipment
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device
has
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improved
with several tools. This new
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device
is made
with an outer layer of metal and an inner layer made with
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clay
lining. This new
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device
is called
''cooker''. It has a
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small
door to the outside of the metal.
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Inside of
the
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clay
lining. There is a great for charcoal
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used
from the fuel and
also
it
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helps
to protect fuel drops from the
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people
and around the air. This
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fire
lights
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device
has three supporters to support
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fo
spot and provide such stability to the firelight.
Furthermore
, the handle can
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help
to transfer
easily
to other places. The
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small
door line for air removed several ashes which have
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come
out from the cooker. The fir
is enclosed
by metal which
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helps
to protect and give more efficiency to the pot. This development of cooking
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devices
has
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seen
more improvement compared with the beginning of the
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old
generation.
Overall
, the
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fire
materials and fuels have a more significant
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device
to operate the
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devices
. The generation of
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people
improving more and more
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ideas
about cooking equipment.
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