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The diagrams below show the floor plans for a trade conference in 2009 and for the same trade conference in 2010.

The diagrams below show the floor plans for a trade conference in 2009 and for the same trade conference in 2010. GJxAw
The given maps illustrate the information about the floor plans for a trade conference in 2009 and also show the developments which occurred in 2010. Overall, it is clear that the floor plan underwent numerous changes, which include the installation of a lounge area with the balcony and removed the meeting rooms. In detail, the trade Centre had two entrances. The main entrance was on the left side of the refreshment and the side entrance to the right hand. In 2009, in front of the main entrance there was a conference area with stage and sitting area, but it had been changed into an exhibition area and also expanded in size. The meeting rooms had been removed in 2010. In addition, in 2009, the balcony was on the west side while in 2010 with it a lounge area had been added. The conference hall had been shifted into the place of an exhibition area in 2010 and also increased in sitting place. The refreshment had been transferred near to the conference hall.
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maps illustrate the information about the floor plans for a trade
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conference
in 2009 and
also
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show
the developments which occurred in 2010.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the floor plan underwent numerous
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changes
, which include the installation of a lounge
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area
with the balcony and removed the meeting rooms.

In detail, the trade
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had two
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entrances
. The main
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entrance
was on the
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left
side of the refreshment and the side
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entrance
to the right hand. In 2009, in front of the main
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entrance
there was a
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conference
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area
with stage and sitting
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area
,
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but
it had been
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changed
into an exhibition
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area
and
also
expanded in size. The meeting rooms had
been removed
in 2010.

In addition
, in 2009, the balcony was on the west side while in 2010 with it a lounge
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area
had been
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added
. The
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conference
hall had
been shifted
into the place of an exhibition
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area
in 2010 and
also
increased in sitting place. The refreshment had
been transferred
near to the
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conference
hall.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the floor plans for a trade conference in 2009 and for the same trade conference in 2010.

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