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The diagrams below show the coastal village of seaville in 1980 to 2010. Task 1

The diagrams below show the coastal village of seaville in 1980 to 2010. Task 1 68kr
The given maps illustrate the changes of coastal rural area of seaville from the years 1980 to 2010. Overall, a dramatic progress had been observed at the given period related to infrastructure of the village. The village was located at the northern side of the sea. In the beginning, the village was tiny with less amenities which rapidly developed over 30 years period including some facilities such as hotel, golf course, retirement village, club, restaurant and permanent houses. Initially, there was no any way that connect east bank toward village, however a new way to bank from retirement village had been constructed over the period. While, a river and the bank remained unchanged throughout the interval. On the other hand, the holiday cottages had been shifted from north-west to east-south side of the village. Moreover, woodland had been removed and a golf course was introduced. Similarly marsh, tea room and sand duties had been excluded from the the village at the end of the given period.
The
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changes
of coastal rural area of
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seaville
from the years 1980 to 2010.
Overall
,
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a dramatic progress
had
been observed
at the
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given
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period
related to infrastructure of the
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village
. The
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village
was located
at the northern side of the sea.

In the beginning, the
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village
was tiny with
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less
amenities which
rapidly
developed over 30 years
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period
including
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some
facilities such as hotel, golf course, retirement
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village
, club, restaurant and permanent
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houses
.
Initially
, there was
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no
any way that connect east bank toward
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village
,
however
a new way to bank from retirement
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village
had
been constructed
over the
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period
. While, a river and the bank remained unchanged throughout the interval.

On the other hand
, the holiday cottages had
been shifted
from north-west to east-south side of the
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village
.
Moreover
, woodland had
been removed
and a golf course
was introduced
.
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Similarly
marsh, tea room and sand duties had
been excluded
from
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the the
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village
at the
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end
of the
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given
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period
.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the coastal village of seaville in 1980 to 2010. Task 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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