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The diagrams below show an island before and after the addition of tourist facilities.

The diagrams below show an island before and after the addition of tourist facilities. llwK
The diagram shows an island that is approximately 900 meters wide and 300 meters across before and after its development into a tourist resort. 41 Before being developed the island was unpopulated apart from a few palm trees and had a beach on the northwest side of the island. After development, the island has a pier and reception centre built on its southern shore. In addition, a number of small sailing boats are available for transport or leisure. On the western side of the pier and reception centre is a small park that also overlooks the sea. On the opposite (north) side of the island is a combined restaurant and leisure centre. On the western end of the island are 8 huts that are close to the beach and surrounded by trees. The eastern end of the island is protected by trees and contains a group of six huts and a children’s playground. This area allows family groups and couples to have separate areas so they do not disturb each other.
The diagram
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island
that is
approximately 900 meters wide and 300

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meters
across
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before
and after its development into a tourist resort. 41

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Before
being developed
the
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island
was unpopulated
apart from a few palm

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trees
and had a beach on the northwest side of the island.

After development, the
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island
has a pier and reception
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centre
built on its

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southern
shore.
In addition
, a number of
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small
sailing boats are available
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for


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transport
or leisure. On the western side of the pier and reception
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centre
is a

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small
park that
also
overlooks the sea. On the opposite (north) side of
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the


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island
is a combined restaurant and leisure
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centre
.

On the western
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end
of the
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island
are 8 huts that are close to the beach and

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surrounded
by trees. The eastern
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end
of the
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island
is protected
by trees
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and


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contains
a group of six huts and a children’s playground. This area
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allows
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family


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groups
and couples to have separate areas
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so
they do not disturb each other.

IELTS academic The diagrams below show an island before and after the addition of tourist facilities.

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171 words
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