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the diagram below shows the process of using water to generate electricity for human use.

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The diagram depicts the pictorial representation of the hydro-electric power generation process. The power generation process begins with the evaporation process. Owing to the sun, seawater is evaporated and convert in to rain in different places. The rainwater is stored in the reservoir. Moreover, to generate electricity, The government makes a dam on the reservoir. Furthermore, water is transferred to the turbine which produces electricity. After that, water is pumped back to the reservoir through the pump. To control water flow, the valve is placed between the dam and turbine. After generating electricity, it is supplied to the transformer station with help of high voltage cables. At the transformer station, electricity is divided for domestic and industrial purposes and it is distributed to different places like hospitals, schools, houses and industries. Overall, hydro-electric power generation is depended on water. Additionally, it is a renewable and environment reliable power source.
The diagram depicts the pictorial representation of the hydro-electric
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power
generation process. The
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generation process
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begins
with the evaporation process. Owing to the sun, seawater
is evaporated
and convert in to rain in
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different
places. The rainwater
is stored
in the reservoir.
Moreover
, to generate
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electricity
, The
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government
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makes
a dam on the reservoir.
Furthermore
,
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water
is transferred
to the turbine which produces
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electricity
. After that,
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water
is pumped
back to the reservoir through the pump. To control
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water
flow, the valve
is placed
between the dam and turbine. After generating
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electricity
, it
is supplied
to the transformer station with
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help
of high voltage cables. At the transformer station,
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electricity
is divided
for domestic and industrial purposes and it
is distributed
to
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different
places like hospitals, schools,
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houses
and industries.
Overall
, hydro-electric
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power
generation 
is depended
on
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water
.
Additionally
, it is a renewable and environment reliable
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power
source.
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IELTS academic the diagram below shows the process of using water to generate electricity for human use.

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