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The diagram shows the production of sugar by a German company

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The picture describes how sugar is produced by a company in Germany. Overall, the process consists of a number of steps, beginning with harvesting sugarcane, through different melting, filtering, and drying stages, and ending with the products being distributed to supermarkets and restaurants. At the beginning of the process, in the tropical regions, sugarcane is harvested to prepare for production, and then the juice is collected by the crusher. Next, partial filtration is happened to collect raw sugar, which is followed by delivery to a German company for the subsequent processing. The process continues with 2 stages of melting and filtering to complete purification, after which sugar syrup is crystallized. Once the sugar has been granules shape, the fan is responsible for drying the sugar to crystallize and harden. At the final stages of the process, the sugar is packaged and they are shipped to supermarkets and restaurants.
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describes
how
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sugar
is produced
by a
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company
in Germany.

Overall
, the
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process
consists of a number of steps, beginning with harvesting sugarcane, through
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different
melting, filtering, and drying stages, and ending with the products
being distributed
to supermarkets and restaurants.

At the beginning of the
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process
, in the tropical regions, sugarcane
is harvested
to prepare for production, and then the juice
is collected
by the crusher.
Next
, partial filtration
is happened
to collect raw
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sugar
, which
is followed
by delivery to a German
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company
for the subsequent processing.

The
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process
continues with 2 stages of melting and filtering to complete purification, after which
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sugar
syrup
is crystallized
. Once the
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sugar
has been granules shape, the fan is responsible for drying the
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sugar
to crystallize and harden. At the final stages of the
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process
, the
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sugar
is
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packaged and
they
are shipped
to supermarkets and restaurants.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the production of sugar by a German company

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
148 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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