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The diagram shows the production of milk

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The given diagram illustrates tye manufacturing of milk. Overall, there are eight stages of production of milk and first stage is grazing the cows and final stage is distributing the final production to consumers. The process commence with grazing cows in fields. After that milk is taken from cows by machines in the dairy farms twice a day. Next step is stored the milk in refrigerators till delivery. After words delivered the milk by trucks in tanks daily to dairy factories. Forwarded milk is put into the machines for process in dairy to make cheese, cream and butter. And also pasteurised milk as fresh milk and packaged in bottles for final step. In the ultimate step is, distributes the final products to supermarkets and shops for consumption.
The
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diagram illustrates
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tye
manufacturing of
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milk
.
Overall
, there are eight stages of production of
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milk
and
first
stage is grazing the cows and
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final
stage is distributing the
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final
production to consumers. The process commence with grazing cows in fields.
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After
that
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milk
is taken
from cows by machines in the dairy farms twice a day.
Next
step
is stored
the
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milk
in refrigerators till delivery.
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After
words delivered the
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milk
by trucks in tanks daily to dairy factories. Forwarded
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milk
is put
into the machines for process in dairy to
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make
cheese, cream and butter. And
also
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pasteurised
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milk
as fresh
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milk
and packaged in bottles for
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final
step. In the ultimate step is, distributes the
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final
products to supermarkets and shops for consumption.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the production of milk

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
127 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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