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Task 1 - the diagrams below shows the development of cutting tools in the stone age. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant TAK=SK 2 - Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Task 1 - the diagrams below shows the development of cutting tools in the stone age. 6W7j
TASK 1 The improvement of cutting equipments states back to the stone age. Over tthe years, prominent changes have taken place in this area. Tool-A and Tool-B are two different images which shows the noticeable differences that took place millions of years ago. Previously, about 1. 4 million years ago, the tools used were more heavy and thick at the same time. However, aging back to 0. 8 million years ago, these instruments were more sleek and sharp as well. Although the development graph was drastically increasing, significant changes are being made through years. The length of these tools is constant throughout the years. Frontal, side and back views as shown in the picture clearly depicts the advancement in these stone age cutting tools. Therefore, all of the drastical improvements helps and enhances the experience of shaping fewer metals and cutting them through. TASK 2In the modern era, improvement in science and technology has bought in many noticeable changes in all the sectors, one of them being Shopping. People often enjoy the process of shopping online rather than offline. An insight of few advantages and disadvantage can be witnessed in the following paragraphs. Primarily, online shopping technologies has bought an enormous amount of lifestyle changes in the new age people. The facility of In-house shopping saves a huge amount of time, larger options to choose from and a less tiring shopping experience on the whole. On the other hand, offline or In-store shopping has an advantage of offering the sense of touch which is a major asset in the world of shopping. The actual fun element of shopping lies mostly in the offline shopping as it is more realistic. Secondarily, the disadvantages which come along with online shopping are fewer in number and the major concern being the unavailability of touch feeling or call it sensation. However, advancements are being made day-by-day to increase the shopping experience. Offline shopping does not offer a large amount of options or varieties and in-fact, there are a plenty of stores in the market which do not provide the customers with their needs. Time is one the major cons of this in-store shopping as the modern world is sometimes lazy and occupied the other times. To conclude, despite of all these shopping concerns, modern age people include shopping in their everyday essentials. According to me, online shopping brings in many flexibilities which aren't always available while shopping offline. However, the scope for betterment is always a rising graph when it comes to technology.
TASK 1 The improvement of cutting equipments states back to the stone
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age
.
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Over tthe
years, prominent
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changes
have taken place in this area. Tool-A and Tool-B are two
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different
images which
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shows
the noticeable differences that took place millions of years ago.

Previously, about 1. 4 million years ago, the tools
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used
were more heavy and thick at the same time.
However
, aging back to 0. 8 million years ago, these instruments were more sleek and sharp
as well
. Although the development graph was
drastically
increasing, significant
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changes
are
being made
through years. The length of these tools is constant throughout the years. Frontal, side and back views as shown in the picture
clearly
depicts the advancement in these stone
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age
cutting tools.

Therefore
,
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all of the
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drastical
improvements
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helps
and enhances the experience of shaping fewer metals and cutting them through.

TASK 2In the modern era, improvement in science and technology has
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bought
in
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many
noticeable
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changes
in all the sectors, one of them being
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Shopping
.
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People
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often
enjoy the process of
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shopping
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online
rather
than offline. An insight of few advantages and disadvantage can
be witnessed
in the following paragraphs.

Primarily
,
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online
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shopping
technologies has
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bought
an enormous amount of lifestyle
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changes
in the new
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age
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people
. The facility of In-
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house
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shopping
saves a huge amount of time, larger options to choose from and a less tiring
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shopping
experience
on the whole
.
On the other hand
, offline or In-store
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shopping
has an advantage of offering the sense of touch which is a major asset in the world of
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shopping
. The actual fun element of
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shopping
lies
mostly
in the offline
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shopping
as it is more realistic.

Secondarily
, the disadvantages which
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come
along with
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online
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shopping
are
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fewer in number
and the major concern being the unavailability of touch feeling or call it sensation.
However
, advancements are
being made
day-by-day to increase the
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shopping
experience. Offline
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shopping
does not offer a large amount of options or varieties and in-fact, there are a
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plenty
of stores in the market which do not provide the customers with their needs. Time is
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one
the major cons of this in-store
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shopping
as the modern world is
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sometimes
lazy and occupied the other times.

To conclude
,
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despite of
all these
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shopping
concerns, modern
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age
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people
include
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shopping
in their everyday essentials.
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According to me
,
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online
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shopping
brings in
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many
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flexibilities
which aren't always available while
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shopping
offline.
However
, the scope for betterment is always a rising graph when it
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comes
to technology.
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IELTS academic Task 1 - the diagrams below shows the development of cutting tools in the stone age.

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
419 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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