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The diagram shows the process for canning pears. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main details and making comparisons where relevant

The diagram shows the process for canning pears. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main details and making comparisons where relevant KG9Dk
The diagram highlights the steps involved in the production of canned pears. There are several stages that take place between picking the fruit and sending it to stores to be sold. After the fruit is picked by hand, it is transported by truck to the factory. At the canning facility, it is washed then checked to ensure that it is of suitable quality. Fruit that passes the quality control stage is kept in cold storage until it is ready to be canned. In the next part of the process, the fruit is first weighed and given a grade. Next, the skin is removed along with the core before it is cut into smaller pieces. Now the slices are ready to be put into cans, which are then sealed. Following this, the cans are cooked at a temperature that is high enough to cook the fruit and sterilize the cans. Once this has been done, the cans are labelled and then placed in storage. Finally, the finished product can be dispatched to where it is sold. The canning process aims to guarantee that the canned fruit is of a high quality and safe to eat.
The diagram highlights the steps involved in the production of canned pears. There are several stages that take place between picking the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fruit
and sending it to stores to
be sold
.

After the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fruit
is picked
by hand, it
is transported
by truck to the factory. At the canning facility, it
is washed
then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
to ensure that it is of suitable quality.
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Fruit
that passes the quality control stage is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
storage until it is ready to
be canned
.

In the
next
part of the process, the
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fruit
is
first
weighed and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a grade.
Next
, the skin
is removed
along with the core
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before
it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
into smaller pieces.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
the slices are ready to
be put
into
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cans
, which are then sealed. Following this, the
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cans
are cooked
at a temperature
that is
high
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enough
to cook the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fruit
and sterilize the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cans
. Once this has
been done
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cans
are labelled
and then placed in storage.
Finally
, the finished product
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can
be dispatched
to where it
is sold
.

The canning process aims to guarantee that the canned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fruit
is of a high quality and safe to eat.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the process for canning pears. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main details and making comparisons where relevant

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
194 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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