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The chart shows sales of five companies around the world between 2009 and 2013.

The chart shows sales of five companies around the world between 2009 and 2013. mbr7N
The chart illustrates sales of Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG, and ZTE around the world in 4 years period from 2009 to 2013. Overall, Samsung had significant growth in 4 years meanwhile Nokia and LG declined dramatically at the end of the period. ZTE rose marginally throughout the period compared to Apple which increased sharply. In the year 2009, Samsung had around 225 million sales, before increasing markedly and at the end, it reached a peak and was certainly 450 million sales. While Apple had the least number of products sold and was around 25 million sales and in 2013 the number of products that have bought from this company consisted 150 million sales. In terms of Nokia and LG, they both had a decrease of gadgets that have been sold and started from just under 450 million sales and well over 100 million sales and declined sharply to 250 million sales and around 75 million sold products, respectively. ZTE was the company that grew marginally throughout the period from exactly 50 million sales to increased by about 5 million sold devices.
The chart illustrates
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of Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG, and
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ZTE
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around
the world in 4 years
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period
from 2009 to 2013.

Overall
, Samsung had significant growth in 4 years meanwhile Nokia and LG declined
dramatically
at the
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end
of the
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period
.
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ZTE
rose
marginally
throughout the
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period
compared to Apple which increased
sharply
.

In the year 2009, Samsung had
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around
225
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million
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sales
,
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before
increasing
markedly
and at the
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end
, it reached a peak and was
certainly
450
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million
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sales
. While Apple had the least number of products sold and was
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around
25
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million
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sales
and in 2013 the number of products that have
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bought
from this
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company
consisted 150
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million
sales.

In terms of Nokia and LG, they both had a decrease of gadgets that have
been sold
and
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started
from
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just
under 450
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million
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sales
and well over 100
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million
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sales
and declined
sharply
to 250
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million
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sales
and
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around
75
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million
sold products,
respectively
.
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ZTE
was the
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company
that grew
marginally
throughout the
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period
from exactly 50
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million
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sales
to increased by about 5
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million
sold devices.
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