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The diagram shows the development of cutting tools in the stone age

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The figure represents the formation of two kinds of tools used for cutting in the stone age. Overall, it can be observed from the given pictures that, tool of type B is much complex in design, whilst tool A is simple from all the views. To commence with, it is depicted that tool of A category have been introduced first 1. 4 million years ago. However, these tools had a sharp cutting edge when it is looked from the side whereas it's front side had a quite uneven and unusual shape. Moreover, tool A is 5 cm long when analysed from back side, it also had an irregular shape and a piercing point in its upper portion. In terms of B tool, it have been discovered 0. 8 million years ago, which is more ancient than the former one. As compared to A, B is slightly large in area, looking from front portion. On the contrary, its side view is too thin as well as honed from both the ends. Likewise A, B is also 5 cm long from its centre when viewed from the back. However, B differs in apperence and by area when compared with A.
The figure represents the formation of two kinds of
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tools
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used
for cutting in the
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stone age
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be observed
from the
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given
pictures that,
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tool
of type B is much complex in design, whilst
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tool
A is simple from all the views. To commence with, it
is depicted
that
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tool
of A category have
been introduced
first
1. 4 million years ago.
However
, these
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tools
had a sharp cutting edge when it
is looked
from the side whereas it's front side had a quite uneven and unusual shape.
Moreover
,
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tool
A is 5 cm long when
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analysed
from back side, it
also
had an irregular shape and a piercing point in its upper portion. In terms of B
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tool
, it
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have
been discovered
0. 8 million years ago, which is more ancient than the former one. As compared to A, B is
slightly
large in area, looking from front portion.
On the contrary
, its side view is too thin
as well
as honed from both the ends.
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Likewise
A, B is
also
5 cm long from its
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centre
when viewed from the back.
However
, B differs in
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apperence
and by area when compared with A.
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