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MAPS - A beachfront in Australia in 1950 and now

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The maps illustrate the seashore, which has taken place in Australia in the years 1950 and now. Overall, the playground disappeared from the map and there were built restaurant, surf club, and a road. There is an expansion of the road which runs around the area. now. One of two car parks at present has increased in size while during the period, significant alteration occurred to the playground, it was redesigned to the car park. Furthermore, now, a restaurant and two surf clubs which are next to the pool were added to the map. In contrast, the lighthouse, dining tables, and pavilion remained unchanged through the period.
The maps illustrate the seashore, which has taken place in Australia in the years 1950 and
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now
.
Overall
, the playground disappeared from the map and there
were built
restaurant, surf club, and a road. There is an expansion of the road which runs around the area.
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now
. One of two car parks at present has increased in size while during the period, significant alteration occurred to the playground, it
was redesigned
to the car park.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, a restaurant and two surf clubs which are
next
to the pool were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to the map.
In contrast
, the lighthouse, dining tables, and pavilion remained unchanged through the period.
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