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The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. OAr7
In the three pictures, we can see the gradual change of the land and its organization. Those graphics show us the changes in the years1950, 1980, 2010. I will summarize general information and compare the main changes hereafter. To start with, it is clear that the Main road did not change its place throughout whole 60 years period. A position of the School and the affiliated The Playground also remains the same. A slight change can be seen in the 2010spicture, as the size of the Playground, was reduced a little bit. The houses on the left side of the School were replaced by anew Car park as well as a new Science block in 1980. The Science block was built as a part of the former school building. Previous Farmland was rebuilt to the sports field. In the 2010s picture, the main change can be seen in the wide size of the Car park. As a result, the previous place for the Playground was diminished and shared with the smaller Sports field. From provided pictures, it is obvious that once place for houses and farmland had to give way to the construction of the huge parkinglot.
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with, it is
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that the Main road did not
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its place throughout whole 60 years period. A position of the School and the affiliated The Playground
also
remains the same. A slight
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change
can be
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in the 2010spicture, as the size of the Playground, was
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by anew Car
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as well
as a new Science block in 1980. The Science block
was built
as a part of the former school building. Previous Farmland was rebuilt to the sports field. In the 2010s picture, the main
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change
can be
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in the wide size of the Car park. As a result, the previous place for the Playground
was diminished
and shared with the smaller Sports field.

From provided pictures, it is obvious that once place for
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and farmland had to give way to the construction of the huge
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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