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The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at school since 1950

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at school since 1950 PRlbK
The map describe changes to a west park secondary school from the years 1950, 1980 and 2010. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the main road is unaffected, houses are removed and constructed other buildings. In 1950, there are houses located in west direction. Just below the houses, Framland is situated. In next thirty years the main road is unaffected, but Houses are removed to build a new science block and car parking area. The farmland is replaced to a sports field. Nmaed the school as the main building. Moreover, Area of the science block remains same from the years 1980 to 2010. The size of the sports feild and playground are drastically decreased inversly increasing the area of the car park in next thirty years. Car park took most of the place in 2010. The area of the school remained same since 1950.
The map
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changes
to a west park secondary school from the years 1950, 1980 and 2010.

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that the main road
is unaffected
,
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houses
are removed
and constructed other buildings.

In 1950, there are
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houses
located in west direction.
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Just
below the
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houses
,
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Framland
is situated
. In
next
thirty years the main road
is unaffected
,
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but
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Houses
are removed
to build a new science block and car parking
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area
. The farmland
is replaced
to a sports field.
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Nmaed
the school as the main building.

Moreover
,
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Area
of the science block remains same from the years 1980 to 2010. The size of the sports
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feild
and playground are
drastically
decreased
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inversly
increasing the
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area
of the car park in
next
thirty years. Car park took most of the place in 2010. The
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area
of the school remained same since 1950.

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