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The diagram shows plan of school site in 2004 and 2024

The diagram shows plan of school site in 2004 and 2024 yLLRd
The diagrams illustrates the area of a school sire in 2004 and plan to transform school till 2024. Overall, these will be major change in the new area of school in 2004. School will extend there area. Hence, students count will be increase just under double. Firstly, as one could see in figures there will be a new building, second parking on the opposite side of school. On the other hand, sports field is replaced by third building of school as well as, with new parking area. Therefore, sports field will shift in southern side towards trees. First and third building will connected by small path. Moreover, there will be a new road constructed by the backyard of second building. Some new trees will growned towards north east. Furthermore, there will new path to connect all three buildings with each other. Subsequently, new sports field compare to previous one is almost half size. Some trees will cut down and some will planted again
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area
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school
sire in 2004 and plan to transform
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school
till 2024.
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, these will be major
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change
in the
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new
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area
of
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school
in 2004.
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School
will extend there
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area
.
Hence
, students count will be increase
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just
under double.
Firstly
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see
in figures there will be a
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new
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building
, second parking on the opposite side of
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school
.
On the other hand
, sports field
is replaced
by third
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building
of
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school
as well
as, with
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new
parking
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area
.
Therefore
, sports field will shift in southern side towards trees.
First
and third
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building
will
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connected
by
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small
path.
Moreover
, there will be a
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new
road constructed by the backyard of second
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building
.
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Some
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new
trees will
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growned
towards
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north east
.
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, there will
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new
path to connect all three
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buildings
with each other.
Subsequently
,
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new
sports field compare to previous one is almost half size.
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Some
trees will
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cut
down and
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some
will planted
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