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Comparing 2 charts for computer ownership

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The given 2 bar charts aide to understand and the details of computer ownership from the year 2002 to 2010. The first chart is providing the common percentage of ownership deatils without of any classification. The second chart has the classification based on the education levels. Chart 1 has the X cordinent as year from the range between the year 2002 to 2010. The Y cordinant is representing the percentage of ownership. Whereas the Chart 2 has the different X cordinant as it is the Education level of the ownership. The Y axis remains the same. The value of charts represents the years but only of 2002 and 2010. So it is not the range from the 2002 to 2010. Comparing the 2 charts, the chart 1 clearly showing the volume of the ownership and we can't get additioanl details since there no any classifications and extra data parameters. But from the Chart 2, we can clearly udnerstand the group of ownership having the high percentage to having the ownership. based on this understanding, we can target the school level education to encourage the crowd to buy or utilize the computer. This would help to increase the usage of compuer from the high school age and there would be chance of better increment of computer ownership.
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charts
aide to understand and the
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details
of computer
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ownership
from the
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year
2002 to 2010.

The
first
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chart
is providing the common percentage of
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ownership
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deatils
without of any classification.
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The
second
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has the classification based on the education levels.

Chart 1 has the X
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cordinent
as
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year
from the range between the
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year
2002 to 2010. The Y
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cordinant
is representing the percentage of
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ownership
. Whereas the
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Chart
2 has the
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different
X
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cordinant
as it is the Education level of the
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ownership
. The Y axis remains the same. The value of
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charts
represents the years
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but
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only
of 2002 and 2010.
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it is not the range from the 2002 to 2010.

Comparing the 2
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, the
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1
clearly
showing the volume of the
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ownership and
we can't
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get
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additioanl
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since there
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no
any classifications and extra data parameters.
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But
from the
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2, we can
clearly
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udnerstand
the group of
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ownership
having the high percentage to having the
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ownership
.
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based
on this understanding, we can target the school level education to encourage the crowd to
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buy
or utilize the computer. This would
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help
to increase the usage of
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compuer
from the high school age and there would be chance of better increment of computer
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ownership
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IELTS academic Comparing 2 charts for computer ownership

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