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describe an enjoyable meal M33yN
Until now, the most enjoyable meal to me is the celebration when I passed the university entrance exam in 2017. You know. In Viet Nam, University is not only a burning desire but also an important goal of all students. After one year of blood, sweat and tears, I succeeded in entering in my dream university and became a glowing pride of my family obviously. In order to celebrate the first remarkable achievement of my life, my parents decided to book a VIP room at a very famous luxury restaurant in my hometown to hold a great party. Then they picked up the phone and invited all of our relatives to come and cheer. I have been joined in a lot of party but this is the first party that held for me personally. Therefore, it brought me a very unique and meaningful emotion that I had never experienced before. I still remember vividly that special meal up to now. It is a luxury restaurant so everything from foods to services and decorations are on the top. The kind of meal we had was buffet so we could eat whatever and how many we wanted. Basically, the foods were totally diverse and unlimited. This was also the first time I had a chance to try some very strange cuisine like alligator and ostrich meat. But the main reason that made this meal became so enjoyable and unforgettable was not just about the food but the vibe, I mean the atmostphere. The atmostphere of a Glorious Victory the feel of becoming the champion. I felt like I was the main actor of an epic history movie about a king won the battle and the whole country is praising him for his triumph. There were a lot of my relatives and my friends came that day. If I was not mistaken, there were over sixty people, crowdedly filled up the whole VIP room. Everyone congratulated me, gave me gifts, tried to take pictures with me. I heard some of realatives talk to their children that: “Look at him, son. You must study hard to become a person like him in the future. ” Enjoying Lip-smacking cuisines with your family and relatives in a glorious victory atmostphere totally gave me the feeling of standing on the top the world. I believe that in one person’s life, a speacial moment like this doesn’t come much. However, I will always try my best to gain outstanding achievements and to have more delightful meals like I used to have.
Until
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, the most enjoyable
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meal
to me is the celebration when I passed the university entrance exam in 2017.

You know. In
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Viet
Nam, University is not
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only
a burning desire
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also
an
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important
goal of all students. After one year of blood, sweat and tears, I succeeded in entering in my dream university and became a glowing pride of my family
obviously
.

In order to celebrate the
first
remarkable achievement of my life, my parents decided to book a VIP room at a
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very
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famous
luxury restaurant in my hometown to hold a great party. Then they picked up the phone and invited all of our relatives to
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come
and cheer.

I have been
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joined
in
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a lot of
party
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but
this is the
first
party that held for me
personally
.
Therefore
, it brought me a
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very unique
and meaningful emotion that I had never experienced
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before
. I
still
remember
vividly
that special
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meal
up to
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now
.

It is a luxury restaurant
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so
everything from foods to services and decorations are on the top. The kind of
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meal
we had was buffet
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so
we could eat whatever and how
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many
we wanted.
Basically
, the foods were
totally
diverse and unlimited. This was
also
the
first
time I had a chance to try
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some
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very
strange cuisine like alligator and ostrich meat.
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But
the main reason that made this
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meal
became
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so
enjoyable and unforgettable was not
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just
about the food
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but
the vibe, I mean the
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atmostphere
. The
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atmostphere
of a Glorious Victory the feel of becoming the champion. I felt like I was the main actor of an epic history movie about a king won the battle and the whole country is praising him for his triumph. There were
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a lot of
my relatives and my friends came that day. If I was not mistaken, there were over sixty
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people
,
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crowdedly
filled up the whole VIP room. Everyone congratulated me, gave me gifts, tried to take pictures with me. I heard
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some
of
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realatives
talk to their children that: “Look at him, son. You
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must
study
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hard
to become a person like him in the future. ” Enjoying Lip-smacking cuisines with your family and relatives in a glorious victory
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atmostphere
totally
gave me the feeling of standing on the top the world. I believe that in one person’s life, a
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speacial
moment like this doesn’t
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come
much.
However
, I will always try my best to gain outstanding achievements and to have more delightful
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meals
like I
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used
to have.
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