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The diagram shows Lakeside development between years 2000 and 2009

The diagram shows Lakeside development between years 2000 and 2009 wKder
The two maps illustrate Lakeside reconstruction from 2000 to 2009. Overall, the residential area which was situated to the north of the river remained unchanged. School didn’t remove it either between 2000 and 2009. Looking at the map of Lakeside of 2000 year, we can conclude that it was a small and undeveloped city. which hadn’t enough facilities for people's comfort, such as shopping centres, educational institutions, parking places for vehicles and offices. On the other hand we can see many changes in the map of Lakeside in 2009. Residential area near the river to the north was replaced by a shopping centre. To the south of the river there were residential areas and industrial complexes were situated. The residential area was removed and the industrial complex was enlarged which gave people job opportunities and gave the city a chance to develop more. To the north of the river, the old town replaced by offices and university, a derelict warehouse was redeveloped as a car park. Looking at the map, we can also see that the art centre was renovated and became a cinema. Lake from which the river starts became a pond.
The two
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maps
illustrate Lakeside reconstruction from 2000 to 2009.

Overall
, the
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residential
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area
which
was situated
to the north of the
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river
remained unchanged. School didn’t remove it either between 2000 and 2009.

Looking at the
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map
of Lakeside of 2000 year, we can conclude that it was a
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small
and undeveloped city.
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which
hadn’t
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enough
facilities for
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people
's comfort, such as shopping
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centres
, educational institutions, parking places for vehicles and offices.

On the other hand
we can
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see
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many
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changes
in the
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map
of Lakeside in 2009.
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Residential
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area
near the
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river
to the north
was replaced
by a shopping
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centre
. To the south of the
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river
there were
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residential
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areas
and industrial complexes
were situated
. The
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residential
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area
was removed
and the industrial complex
was enlarged
which gave
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people
job opportunities and gave the city a chance to develop more. To the north of the
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river
, the
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old
town replaced by offices and university, a derelict warehouse
was redeveloped
as a car park. Looking at the
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map
, we can
also
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see
that the art
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centre
was renovated
and became a cinema. Lake from which the
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river
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starts
became a pond.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows Lakeside development between years 2000 and 2009

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