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The line graphs show the ridership numbers between 1989 and 2009 and bus and tram passenger numbers from 2000 to 2008 in Melbourne. According to the first graph, it is apparent that the graph showed an upward trend throughout the period.

The line graphs show the ridership numbers between 1989 and 2009 and bus and tram passenger numbers from 2000 to 2008 in Melbourne. According to the first graph, it is apparent that the graph showed an upward trend throughout the period. The number of public transportation passengers remained stable at around 280 million from 1989 to 1994 and had rose to about 370 million over the 10-year period. Also, the numbers increased rapidly to almost 500 million at the end of the period. In the second graph, it is clear that the two graphs had some fluctuation during the 8 years. However, the number of bus users were higher than the number of tram users in 2008. The tram passengers’ numbers were less than 150 million from 2000 to 2002 and grow to over 150 million in 2004, before falling to around 140 million until 2006. Then they rose again to 200 million in 2008. The bus passengers’ numbers were approximately 120 million between 2000 and 2003, but the numbers had a gradual growth from around 120 million to around 250 million over the 5-year, which was the highest number throughout the period.

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graphs
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numbers
 between 1989 and 2009 and bus and tram You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcustomerfaretouristcommuterpatrontraveler
passenger
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numbers
 from 2000 to 2008 in Melbourne.

According to the first
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graph
, it is apparent that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withchart
graph
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showed
 an upward trend throughout the period.

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passengers
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million
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 over the 10-year period. Also
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numbers
 increased rapidly
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end
 of the period.

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some
 fluctuation during the 8 years.

However
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 of bus users were higher than the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
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 of tram users in 2008.

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passengers’
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numbers
 were less than 150 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
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 in 2004, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
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around
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million
 until 2006. Then they rose again to 200 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 in 2008. The bus You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcustomerfaretouristcommuterpatrontraveler
passengers’
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numbers
 were approximately 120 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
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 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
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 throughout the period. 