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The diagram shows how sunflower oil is produced

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The diagram illustrates a linear process in which sunflower oil is manufactured from a number of sunflower seeds. Overall, it is noticeable that this process involve several steps, from collecting sunflower seeds to pressing their oil for culinary and commercial purposes. To begin with, collected sunflower seeds are put into a magnetic drum before being placed in a cleaning seive. To complete this process, smaller pieces of seeds are crushed by a huge stoning machine. The aformentioned processes, consist of being put into a magnetic drum; being placed in a cleaning seive; being crushed by a stoning machine, assemble to a cleaning step. To proceed with the next step, the ground seeds are put into a dehuller. Afterwards, seeds are going to be flaked into smaller and thinner pieces prior to being cooked in a large cooking machine. Finally, sunflower seeds are pressed by a pressing machine to be a sunflower oil for sale.
The diagram illustrates a linear
process
in which sunflower oil
is manufactured
from a number of sunflower seeds.

Overall
, it is noticeable that this
process
involve several steps, from collecting sunflower
seeds
to pressing their oil for culinary and commercial purposes.

To
begin
with, collected sunflower
seeds
are put
into a magnetic drum
before
being placed
in a cleaning
seive
. To complete this
process
, smaller pieces of
seeds
are crushed
by a huge stoning
machine
. The
aformentioned
processes
, consist of
being put
into a magnetic drum;
being placed
in a cleaning
seive
;
being crushed
by a stoning
machine
, assemble to a cleaning step.

To proceed with the
next
step, the ground
seeds
are put
into a
dehuller
. Afterwards,
seeds
are going to
be flaked
into smaller and thinner pieces prior to
being cooked
in a large cooking
machine
.
Finally
, sunflower
seeds
are pressed
by a pressing
machine
to be a sunflower oil for sale.
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