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the chart below shows world energy consumption from 1965 to 2013

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The line graph details the worldwide usage of oil, coal, natural gas, hydro, and other renewable resources between 1965 and 2013. Units are measured in billion metric tons of oil equivalent. Overall, it is obvious that there are increases pattern can be seen in all resources that were consumed. It is also clear that they all maintained the same reorder throughout the period. However, it should be noted that fossil fuels had higher consumption levels than hydro and other renewable energy. Starting the period with the highest position, oil had a considerable rise from 1. 5 billion tons to around 2. 6 billion tons within 7 years (from 1965 to 1971) then drop slightly to 2. 5 billion tons, the same pattern of rising and drop can also be seen between 1975 and 1983 before oil started to increase gradually again and remained the highest position as the most used energy. Coal and natural gas experienced significant growths by 2. 5 billion tons, with the former stood at just under 1. 5 billion tons in 1965 and ended the period in 2013 at roughly 3. 9 billion tons with a sudden rise since 1999, whereas the latter, which had a sustained growth from around 0. 6 billion tons in 1965 to just over 3 billion tons in 2013. However, coal still remained higher position than natural gas throughout the period. It can be seen that hydro and other renewable sources didn’t have any big changes. While hydro rose slightly by around 0. 7 billion tons (from roughly 0. 2 to 0. 9) over a period of 69 years, other renewable energy remained flat before slightly rose in 1999 and end at just under 0. 5 billion tons at the end of the period.
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the worldwide usage of
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, coal, natural gas, hydro, and
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renewable
resources between 1965 and 2013. Units
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billion
metric tons of
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in all resources that
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that they all maintained the same reorder throughout the
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that fossil fuels had higher consumption levels than hydro and
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other
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renewable
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Starting the
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with the highest position,
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oil
had a considerable rise from 1. 5
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tons to around 2. 6
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tons within 7 years (from 1965 to 1971) then drop
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tons, the same pattern of rising and drop can
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between 1975 and 1983
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energy. Coal and natural gas experienced significant growths by 2. 5
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that hydro and
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energy remained flat
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