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The diagram shows how fish is canned.Overall, there are 15 stages in the process which involves trawling fish from the water. The fishes need temperatures of -18c. The fishing boat arrived at port.The fishes are unloading and weights before being thawed.They’re prepared to cut into big pieces for getting steam cooked.After cooked fishes are cooled and filtering out then they cut into small pieces.Put these pieces in canned with add brine,water or oil added.After packing and sealing the canned

The diagram shows how fish is canned. Overall, there are 15 stages in the process which involves trawling fish from the water. The fishes need temperatures of -18c. The fishing boat arrived at port. The fishes are unloading and weights before being thawed. They’re prepared to cut into big pieces for getting steam cooked. After cooked fishes are cooled and filtering out then they cut into small pieces. Put these pieces in canned with add brine, water or oil added. After packing and sealing the canned 7Wk13
The diagram shows how fish is canned. Overall, there are 15 stages in the process which involves trawling fish from the water. The fishes need temperatures of -18c. The fishing boat arrived at port. The fishes are unloading and weights before being thawed. They’re prepared to cut into big pieces for getting steam cooked. After cooked fishes are cooled and filtering out then they cut into small pieces. Put these pieces in canned with add brine, water or oil added. After packing and sealing the canned
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Overall
, there are 15 stages in the process which involves trawling fish from the water. The fishes need temperatures of -18c. The fishing boat arrived at port.
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being thawed
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pieces for getting steam cooked. After cooked fishes
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pieces. Put these pieces in canned with
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brine, water or oil
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. After packing and sealing the
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how fish is canned. Overall, there are 15 stages in the process which involves trawling fish from the water. The fishes need temperatures of -18c. The fishing boat arrived at port. The fishes are unloading and weights before being thawed. They’re prepared to cut into big pieces for getting steam cooked. After cooked fishes are cooled and filtering out then they cut into small pieces. Put these pieces in canned with add brine, water or oil added. After packing and sealing the canned

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