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The diagram show the step in the process of manufacturers yogurt

The diagram show the step in the process of manufacturers yogurt Q5VXP
The picture demonstrates the procedure of manufacturing yogurt and preparing ir for sale. Overall, the production of yoghurt has seven steps. This process is lenghty but simple. The temperature of milk play vital role to making yogurt. To intiate step, sufficient quality of milk heated at 90° celsius, or 200°fehrenhit for 30 min. The more time milk heated up the thicker yogurt become following this step, the milk is cooled at 44°celsius. In the next step, Yogurt starter or live bacteria inoculated in the milk and the yogurt is kept at a temperature of 37° celsius for 4 hours. Furthermore, after finishing heating of milk the product stays at cold temperature in fridge then the yogurt is mixed with different fruit and sugar. The last step is the transportation of final product to shops to be sold, but before yogurt is divided in to different packages.
The picture demonstrates the procedure of manufacturing yogurt and preparing
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ir
for sale.
Overall
, the production of
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yoghurt
has seven
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steps
. This process is
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lenghty
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but
simple. The temperature of
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milk
play vital role to making yogurt. To
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intiate
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step
, sufficient quality of
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milk
heated at 90°
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celsius
, or 200°fehrenhit for 30 min. The more time
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milk
heated up the thicker yogurt become following this
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step
, the
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milk
is cooled
at 44°celsius. In the
next
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step
, Yogurt starter or
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live
bacteria inoculated in the
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milk
and the yogurt is
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kept
at a temperature of 37°
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celsius
for 4 hours.
Furthermore
, after finishing heating of
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milk
the product stays at
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cold
temperature in fridge then the yogurt
is mixed
with
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different
fruit and sugar. The last
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step
is the transportation of final product to shops to
be sold
,
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but
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before
yogurt
is divided
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in to
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different
packages.
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IELTS academic The diagram show the step in the process of manufacturers yogurt

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  American English
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146 words
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