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The diagram indicates the way to manufacture electricity

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The diagram indicates the way to manufacture electricity. In general, there are many different stepts, starting with combining of coal and oxygen and undergoing various chemical processes to produce electricity. It is completely clear that at first, coal is transported to a furnace - combined with oxygen. Then, the waste-slag and raw syngas remove harmful contaminants contained in coal such as: CO2, mercury, and sulphur. Not only the contaminants but also purified gas is the product of this stage. After that, purified gas is used to run a gas turbine connected to a generator. Afterwards, elecrtricity is created. On the other hand, gas turbine also produces hot exhaust gases by taking advantage of the purified syngas. Through utilizing a heat recovery steam, the generator produces steam which activates the turbines of a steam turbine to bring out additional electricity. Additional electicity together with the electricity produced before are ready to be transmitted to homes.
The diagram indicates the way to manufacture electricity.
In general
, there are
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different
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stepts
, starting with combining of coal and oxygen and undergoing various chemical processes to produce electricity.

It is completely
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clear
that at
first
, coal
is transported
to a furnace
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combined with oxygen. Then, the waste-slag and raw
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syngas
remove harmful contaminants contained in coal such as: CO2, mercury, and
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sulphur
. Not
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only
the contaminants
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but
also
purified
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gas
is the product of this stage. After that, purified
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gas
is
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used
to run a
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gas
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turbine
connected to a generator. Afterwards,
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elecrtricity
is created
.

On the other hand
,
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gas
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turbine
also
produces hot exhaust gases by taking advantage of the purified
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syngas
. Through utilizing a heat recovery steam, the generator produces steam which activates the
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turbines
of a steam
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turbine
to bring out additional electricity. Additional
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electicity
together with the electricity produced
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before
are ready to
be transmitted
to homes.
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IELTS academic The diagram indicates the way to manufacture electricity

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6.0
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