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The diagram indicates the aggregate process of producing a lead pencil.

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The diagram indicates the aggregate process of producing a lead pencil. Overall, a pencil’s production comprises two primary stages: the cultivation of trees and the shaping process. Seemingly, it takes nearly four years to make this school thing. Initially, seeds are sown and after a certain period of time, we can see their spouts. Then, 4-month-planted trees are transported to a new environment - industrial zones. By the time, the trees have gradually grown and when they are 14 years old, they will be chopped down and moved to factories. Looking at the given pictures, the following steps is shaping. With the help of specialized machines, big wooden blocks are cut into a myriad of thin ‘slats’, which are kept into the storages for 60 days before being formed. Workers place tones of black lead into grooves and use glue to make them fixed. After that, other slats are put above and then crushed together with hard pressure and heat. Small wooden cut pieces are painted, sharpened and stamped respectively to produce the ultimate products - lead pencils.
The diagram indicates the aggregate process of producing a lead pencil.

Overall
, a pencil’s production comprises two primary stages: the cultivation of trees and the shaping process.
Seemingly
, it takes
nearly
four years to
make
this school thing.

Initially
, seeds
are sown
and after a certain period of time, we can
see
their spouts. Then, 4-month-planted trees
are transported
to a new environment
-
industrial zones. By the time, the trees have
gradually
grown and when they are 14 years
old
, they will
be chopped
down and
moved
to factories.

Looking at the
given
pictures, the following steps is shaping. With the
help
of specialized machines,
big
wooden blocks are
cut
into a myriad of thin ‘slats’, which are
kept
into the
storages
for 60 days
before
being formed
. Workers place tones of black lead into grooves and
use
glue to
make
them
fixed
. After that, other slats
are put
above and then crushed together with
hard
pressure and heat.
Small
wooden
cut
pieces
are painted
, sharpened and stamped
respectively
to produce the ultimate products
-
lead pencils.
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IELTS academic The diagram indicates the aggregate process of producing a lead pencil.

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