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The table below shows the percentage of people employed in various sectors inCalifornia in 2010 and one possible projection for percentages in 2020. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The table below shows the percentage of people employed in various sectors inCalifornia in 2010 and one possible projection for percentages in 2020. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. X7q5E
The table illustrates the proportion of employees in a wide range of sectors in California in 2010 and an estimate in 2030. Overall, over a period of 20 years, while the number of people employed in the government, manufacturing/Agriculture and Low wage is expected to decrease, the opposite is true for that of the remaining sectors, except for Business/Administration, whose employment rates are forecasted to remain unchanged. It can be seen that the number of employees is projected to remain unchanged throughout the 20 years, at 13%. At the beginning of the period, Information Technology’s employment rate was the smallest compared to other sectors, at about 8%. After 20 years, the Health sector is predicted to show the most significant rise, by 11%, becoming the highest in 2030. There are projections for employment rates of both Services and Information Technology, which will increase slightly by 2% and 3% respectively. In 2010, Low wage had the highest employment rate, about 24%, while that of manufacturing/agriculture was the smallest, equal to the number of individuals employed in Information Technology. Over a period of 20 years, the number of employees in Manufacturing/Agriculture is expected to decrease by half, while the number of employees in Government and Low wage is estimated to decline moderately, by 4% and 8% respectively.
The table illustrates the proportion of
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in a wide range of
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sectors
in California in 2010 and an estimate in 2030.
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, over a period of 20 years, while the
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number
of
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people
employed in the
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government
, manufacturing/Agriculture and Low wage is
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expected
to decrease, the opposite is true for that of the remaining
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sectors
,
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except for
Business/Administration, whose
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employment
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rates
are forecasted
to remain unchanged.

It can be
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seen
that the
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number
of
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employees
is projected
to remain unchanged throughout the 20 years, at 13%.

At the beginning of the period, Information Technology’s
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employment
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rate
was the smallest compared to other
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sectors
, at about 8%. After 20 years, the Health
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sector
is predicted
to
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show
the most significant rise, by 11%, becoming the highest in 2030. There are projections for
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employment
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rates
of both Services and Information Technology, which will increase
slightly
by 2% and 3%
respectively
.

In 2010, Low wage had the highest
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employment
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rate
, about 24%, while that of manufacturing/agriculture was the smallest, equal to the
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number
of individuals employed in Information Technology. Over a period of 20 years, the
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number
of
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employees
in Manufacturing/Agriculture is
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expected
to decrease by half, while the
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number
of
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employees
in
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Government
and Low wage
is estimated
to decline
moderately
, by 4% and 8%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage of people employed in various sectors inCalifornia in 2010 and one possible projection for percentages in 2020. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

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