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The graph below shows the average number of Korean people travelling each day by personal car, bus or taxi between 1960 and 2020."

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The line chart illustrates the average amount of Korean citizen travelling everyday by other vehicles: personal car, bus or taxi from 1960 to 2020. Overall, what stand outs is that the number of travellers used personal car and taxi in Korea dramatically increased in each decades, whereas the figure for bus saw an opposite trend. In 1960, there were about 5. 8 millions people used personal car and nearly 3 millions citizen travelled by taxi. The figure for car considerably rose from 1970, went through up and down between 1990 and 2010 and hit the peak in 2020 with 9 millions travellers. The figure for taxi as went up as from 1960 and reached its zenith in 2020 with nearly 5 millions people. During this 60- years period, the trend in bus user was decreased. In 1970, the number of people went by bus was 4. 5 millions. The figure that of bus fell and reach a record low with 3 millions in 2020.
The line chart illustrates the average amount of Korean citizen travelling everyday by other vehicles: personal
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from 1960 to 2020.

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in Korea
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for bus
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an opposite trend.

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citizen travelled by
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. The
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considerably
rose from 1970, went through up and down between 1990 and 2010 and hit the peak in 2020 with 9
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travellers
. The
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for
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as went up as from 1960 and reached its zenith in 2020 with
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5
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millions
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went by bus was 4. 5
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that of bus fell and reach a record low with 3
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in 2020.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the average number of Korean people travelling each day by personal car, bus or taxi between 1960 and 2020. "

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