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The diagram illustrates various stages in the development of a salmon.

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The diagram illustrates various stages in the development of a salmon. Overall, there are eight stages in a salmon's life cycle, starting from eggs and until they reach full maturity. At the first stage of the life cycle, the female salmon chooses a location in the river and lays a massive number of eggs, which are then incubated to develop into tiny fish. At this stage, they only have a tail and have not yet fully formed a fish shape. In the next stage, the fish grow rapidly in size and move downstream to freshwater, before moving to estuaries to continue growing. After a period of culture in estuaries, the salmon migrate to the ocean, where they eventually become fully grown adults. Finally, the adult fish travel upstream to the spawning areas of the river. here they reproduce and lay eggs, and the life cycle begins again.
The diagram illustrates various
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in the development of a salmon.

Overall
, there are eight
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stages
in a salmon's life cycle, starting from eggs and until they reach full maturity.

At the
first
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stage
of the life cycle, the female salmon chooses a location in the river and lays a massive number of eggs, which are then incubated to develop into tiny fish. At this
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stage
, they
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only
have a tail and have not
yet
fully
formed a fish shape. In the
next
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stage
, the fish grow
rapidly
in size and
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move
downstream to freshwater,
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before
moving to estuaries to continue growing.

After a period of culture in estuaries, the salmon migrate to the ocean, where they
eventually
become
fully
grown adults.
Finally
, the adult fish travel upstream to the spawning areas of the river.
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they reproduce and lay eggs, and the life cycle
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates various stages in the development of a salmon.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
147 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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