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The pie chart shows the income sources and expenditure of children's charity in USA in one year,2016

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The assigned pie charts reveal the information about the sources of annual revenue and expenses by the USA based children's charitable organization in year 2016. Overall, it is lucid that donated food emerged as a leader in the income sources and most of the expenses were spent program services in one year. At a fleeting glance, it is immensely clear that the biggest chunk was taken by Donated food in revenue sources of USA charity foundation during 2016, whereas investment income, other income, government grants grabbed the smallest slice, accounting for merely 0. 2% and 0. 4%; however, the contribution of community and program lay between the range of 2. 2% and 10. 4% during the given time span. Despite this, the huge amount of Money was consumed by program services with 95. 4% in year 2016 as against others; in spite of, the expenditure on fundraising and management was 1. 6% and 2. 6%, respectively.
The assigned pie charts reveal the information about the sources of annual revenue and expenses by the USA based children's charitable organization in year 2016.

Overall
, it is lucid that donated food emerged as a leader in the income sources and most of the expenses
were spent
program services in one year.

At a fleeting glance, it is
immensely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the biggest chunk
was taken
by Donated food in revenue sources of USA charity foundation during 2016, whereas investment income, other income,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
grants grabbed the smallest slice, accounting for
merely
0. 2% and 0. 4%;
however
, the contribution of community and program lay between the range of 2. 2% and 10. 4% during the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
time span.

Despite this, the huge amount of Money
was consumed
by program services with 95. 4% in year 2016 as against others;
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
in spite of
, the expenditure on fundraising and management was 1. 6% and 2. 6%,
respectively
.
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