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The diagram illustrates the process steps involved in production of carbonated drinks from scratch.

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The diagram illustrates the process steps involved in production of carbonated drinks from scratch. Overall, the process takes place in five major steps starting with cleansing of water to packaging of the final product. The making starts with purification of water, where the raw water is passed through a filter to remove the impurities and softened removing the hardness. Thereafter, the water is then treated with chemicals and pumped on to the heating and evaporation and carbonation section where water is cooled down and injested with carbon dioxide. On the latter stages the carbonated water is added with different agents such as colour, syrup and flavours which are then transfered to filling and filtering stage. The drink is then hereby packed in to cans and bottles. These products are then packed into larger containers and start there final leg of the process, the journey to suppermarkets using different transporting methods.
The diagram illustrates the process steps involved in production of carbonated drinks from scratch.

Overall
, the process takes place in five major steps starting with cleansing of
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water
to packaging of the final product.

The making
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starts
with purification of
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water
, where the raw
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water
is passed
through a filter to remove the impurities and softened removing the hardness. Thereafter, the
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water
is then treated with chemicals and pumped on to the heating and evaporation and carbonation section where
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water
is cooled
down and
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injested
with carbon dioxide.

On the latter stages the carbonated
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water
is
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added
with
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different
agents such as
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colour
, syrup and
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flavours
which are then
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transfered
to filling and filtering stage. The drink is then hereby packed in to cans and bottles. These products are then packed into larger containers and
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start
there final leg of the process, the journey to
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suppermarkets
using
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transporting methods.

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the process steps involved in production of carbonated drinks from scratch.

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150 words
6.0
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