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the given graph shows water supply

the given graph shows water supply 962XX
As we know water is very essentile thing for daily life. The given charts indicate the information about the amount of water quality which supplied to two regions all the world. we will summarise the information and we will find the key feacture. To begine with, water supply is the most important thing. Firstly, if we compair the graph than we can se that in 1990 Australia was having higher supply than the South East Asia because in 1990 Australia was having near to 80% of supply and in South East Asia was having only 38% of water supply but after 20 year in 2010. The supply of water has being increased to 99% and South East Asia increased to 66% which is huge difference. secondly if we see in cleanliness than quality has changed after 20 years like in 1990 the water quality in Australia was 66% which has changed to 83% in year 2010 but in opposite South East Asia has dcreased quality like in 1990 the quality was 40% and goen down to 27%. In conclusion we can say that the supply of water has increased in 2010 than the 1990. but if we llok in cleanliness graph then we had noticed that South East Asia had get decreased water quality up to4% than the perious one.
As we know
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essentile
thing for daily life. The
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charts indicate the information about the amount of
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water
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quality
which supplied to two regions all the world.
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we
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information and
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feacture
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is the most
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compair
the graph than we can
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se that
in 1990 Australia was having higher
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supply
than the South East Asia
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because
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supply
and in South East Asia was having
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38% of
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after 20 year in 2010. The
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of
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to 99% and South East Asia increased to 66% which is huge difference.
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secondly
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in cleanliness than
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changed
after 20 years like in 1990 the
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in Australia was 66% which has
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changed
to 83% in year 2010
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in opposite South East Asia has
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dcreased
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quality
like in 1990 the
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was 40% and
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decreased
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up to4% than the
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IELTS academic the given graph shows water supply

Academic
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3 paragraphs
220 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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