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The diagram illustrates how to produce canned fruit step by step. It is clear that there are several main steps in the process, from the picking of the pears to the final canned product.

The diagram illustrates how to produce canned fruit step by step. It is clear that there are several main steps in the process, from the picking of the pears to the final canned product. dq31E
The diagram illustrate the information about canned fruit step by step. At the first step, the pear picked by hand and then transported to factory. Next, the pear wash with water after that send to quality check by magnified view. After checking the quality of pear, it stored in cool place. Before peeled it, weight the pear and cut into slices. In the next step, put the slices in the can along sealed it after that cook the sealed canning. In the final stage, it labeled and stored and finally dispatched to the market for sale. Overall, there are 14 steps to ready the fruit cans.
The diagram
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illustrate
the information about canned fruit
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step
by
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. At the
first
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step
, the pear picked by hand and then transported to factory.
Next
, the pear wash with water after that
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send
to quality
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check
by magnified view. After checking the quality of pear, it stored in cool place.
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Before
peeled it, weight the pear and
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cut
into slices. In the
next
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step
, put the slices in the can along sealed it after that cook the sealed canning. In the final stage, it labeled and stored and
finally
dispatched to the market for sale.
Overall
, there are 14
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steps
to ready the fruit cans.

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how to produce canned fruit step by step. It is clear that there are several main steps in the process, from the picking of the pears to the final canned product.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
106 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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