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The Bar graph illustrates the proportion of international students in university graduates studying in Canadian universities in 2001 and 2006.

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The Bar graph illustrates the proportion of international students in university graduates studying in Canadian universities in 2001 and 2006. Overall, it is clear that among the given universities New Brunswick has the maximum proportion of international graduates in both years. There is a rise in the proportion of students in all the universities except for Alberta University and New Brunswick stood first in the enrolment of foreign students in both years. In 2001, the percentage of enrolment for Ontario, Newfoundland and Labrador, Manitoba, and British Columbia were below was at about 3%, 3. 2%, 3. 2% and 4% respectively. Whereas In Alberta, Quebec, Nova Scotia and the New Brunswick universities the proportion of people enrolled was at and above 5% which was about 5%, 6%, 6. 2%, and 6. 5% respectively. By the year 2006, Some universities showed a great increase in proportion in which New Brunswick stood first approximately at 12%. In addition, Nova Scotia and British Colombia universities showed stood approximately at 10. 2% of enrolment. Quebec, Ontario international student enrolment was approximately at 8% and 6% respectively.
The Bar graph illustrates the
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students
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graduates studying in Canadian
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universities
in 2001 and 2006.

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that among the
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universities
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New
Brunswick has the maximum
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proportion
of international graduates in both years. There is a rise in the
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of
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students
in all the
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except for
Alberta
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University
and
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New
Brunswick stood
first
in the
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enrolment
of foreign
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students
in both years.

In 2001, the percentage of
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enrolment
for Ontario, Newfoundland and Labrador, Manitoba, and British Columbia were below was at about 3%, 3. 2%, 3. 2% and 4%
respectively
. Whereas In Alberta, Quebec, Nova Scotia and the
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New
Brunswick
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universities
the
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proportion
of
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people
enrolled was at and above 5% which was about 5%, 6%, 6. 2%, and 6. 5%
respectively
.

By the year 2006,
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universities
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showed
a great increase in
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in which
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New
Brunswick stood
first
approximately at 12%.
In addition
, Nova Scotia and British Colombia
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stood approximately at 10. 2% of
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. Quebec, Ontario international
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was approximately at 8% and 6%
respectively
.
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