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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. IELTS Diagram

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This diagram is a pictorial representation of the honey making process that bees perform which, begins with the bees leaving their hives in search of flowers and ends with the production of honey. Overall, this process consists of 7 important steps. Bees live in hexagonal containers called "hives" and it is when they leave their hives, the process of making honey is initiated. In order to collect a sweet liquid called "Nectar", they fly from flower to flower and afterwards that sweet juice is stored in the insides of the hives to be further processed. Once the nectar has been stored in the hive cells, the bees start to flap their wings in order to pass wind to complete the process of vaporizing the water from the nectar. After the process of evaporation is complete, the hive cells are left with freshly produced raw honey. To sum up, we can see the hard-work of bees which they perform to prepare natural sweetener, called "Honey" in the given diagram.
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process
that bees perform which,
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begins
with the bees leaving their hives in search of flowers and ends with the production of honey.
Overall
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process
consists of 7
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Bees
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live
in hexagonal containers called
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hives
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and it is when they
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leave
their hives, the
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process
of making honey
is initiated
. In order to collect a sweet liquid called
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Nectar
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, they
fly
from flower to flower and afterwards that sweet juice
is stored
in the insides of the hives to be
further
processed.

Once the nectar has
been stored
in the hive cells, the bees
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start
to flap their wings in order to pass wind to complete the
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process
of vaporizing the water from the nectar. After the
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process
of evaporation is complete, the hive cells are
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left
with
freshly
produced raw honey.

To sum up, we can
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see
the
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hard
-work of bees which they perform to prepare natural sweetener, called
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Honey
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in the
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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