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The given bar chart illustrates the primary, secondary and tertiary education levels of girls in relation to boys in developed and developing countries in 1990 and 1998.

The given bar chart illustrates the primary, secondary and tertiary education levels of girls in relation to boys in developed and developing countries in 1990 and 1998. VRYm
The given bar chart illustrates the primary, secondary and tertiary education levels of girls in relation to boys in developed and developing countries in 1990 and 1998. Overall, girls’ participation in education increased over the period although the figures were clearly much higher in the developed world. The only sector in which more girls were enrolled than boys was in tertiary education in developed countries, although in developing areas, this had the lowest enrolment figures. In terms of primary education, even though rates rose, there were still under 90 girls enrolled for every 100 boys in poorer countries while in richer regions, there was little change or difference between the genders. Similarly, in high school, the ratio of girls to boys enrolled was almost 100: 100 in both years, and in developing countries, it increased from about 70: 100 to over 80: 100. Regarding tertiary education, the biggest discrepancy can be seen. While in the developed world, more girls than boys were enrolled, in developing nations, under 80 girls were studying for every 100 boys in 1998, despite an increase.
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boys
in developed and
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developing countries
in 1990 and 1998.

Overall
,
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girls’
participation in

education increased over the

period although the figures

were
clearly
much higher in the

developed world. The
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sector in which more
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girls
were enrolled
than
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boys
was in

tertiary education in developed

countries, although in

developing areas, this had the

lowest
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enrolment
figures.

In terms of primary education,

even though
rates rose, there

were
still
under 90
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girls
enrolled

for every 100
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boys
in poorer

countries while in richer

regions, there was
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little
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change


or difference between the

genders.
Similarly
, in high

school, the ratio of
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girls
to boys

enrolled was almost 100: 100 in

both years, and in developing

countries, it increased from

about 70: 100 to over 80: 100.

Regarding tertiary education,

the biggest discrepancy can

be
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seen
. While in the developed

world, more
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girls
than boys

were enrolled
, in developing

nations, under 80
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girls
were

studying for every 100
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boys
in

1998, despite an increase.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the primary, secondary and tertiary education levels of girls in relation to boys in developed and developing countries in 1990 and 1998.

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