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The diagram below shows the process for making a water clock.

The diagram below shows the process for making a water clock. P3Ew
The given diagram reveals the information about the procedure for making a water clock with the help of different kind of equipments. It is very clear and coherent representation. It can be seen that the diagram shows the basic equipments are used like the one stand and two bottles are required which are used to fix in stand. There the one bottle which is full fix by the tape with stand. One other bottle is require which is head cut off. Moving ahead, one straw is fix on bottle with help of glue and also require the tap of water. On next point the process is start of water clock. Firstly, the hole in the center of the full size bottle and cover the hole with finger before fill the top bottle to overflow. After this, the next step after fill up the bottle with water finger away from hole. As a result, the water in the ways of drops left in second bottle and time is calculate in per minute. If the water is empty that process is repeat again and again. Overall, it is evident that this process require so much time, this is repeat again and again as well as gives only 5 to 10 minutes of time detail.
The
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given
diagram reveals the information about the procedure for making a
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water
clock with the
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help
of
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different
kind of equipments. It is
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very
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clear
and coherent representation.

It can be
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seen
that the diagram
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shows
the basic equipments are
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used
like the one stand and two
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bottles
are required
which are
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used
to
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fix
in stand. There the one
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bottle
which is full
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fix
by the tape with stand. One other
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bottle
is
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require
which is head
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cut
off. Moving ahead, one straw is
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fix
on
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bottle
with
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help
of glue and
also
require the tap of water.

On
next
point the process is
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start
of
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water
clock.
Firstly
, the hole in the center of the full size
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bottle
and cover the hole with finger
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before
fill the top
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bottle
to overflow. After this, the
next
step after fill up the
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bottle
with
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water
finger away from hole.
As a result
, the
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water
in the ways of drops
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left
in second
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bottle
and time is
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calculate
in per minute. If the
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water
is empty that process is
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repeat again
and again.

Overall
, it is evident that this process require
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so
much time, this is
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repeat again
and again
as well
as gives
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only
5 to 10 minutes of time detail.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process for making a water clock.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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