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The diagram illustrates different stages in the process of manufacturing bricks from the digging step to delivery.

The diagram illustrates different stages in the process of manufacturing bricks from the digging step to delivery. PMpGg
A glanse at the diagram provided the information about the process of making bricks and delived Overall, what stands out from the process is that there are seven procedures in the production of bricks manufacturing, starting with the preparation of clay and ending with the delivering of bricks to customers. In the first stage of the producing, clay is dug from the ground. Then, The clay is placed onto a metal grid and processed in a roller which is filled with sand and water. Subsequently, the mixture is either put in a mould or used a wire cutter to make shaped bricks. At the fourth stage in the process, the bricks are put in a drying oven for one or two days. The dried bricks are heated in a kiln with a moderate temperature (200 to 980 degrees), and high temperature up to 1300 degrees, before spending two to three days in a cooling chamber. . Finally, the finished bricks are packaged and delivered on a lorry for delivery.
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at the diagram provided the information about the process of making
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bricks
and
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delived


Overall
, what stands out from the process is that there are seven procedures in the production of
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bricks
manufacturing, starting with the preparation of clay and ending with the delivering of
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bricks
to customers.

In the
first
stage of the producing, clay
is dug
from the ground. Then, The clay
is placed
onto a metal grid and processed in a roller which
is filled
with sand and water.
Subsequently
, the mixture is either put in a
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mould
or
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used
a wire cutter to
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make
shaped bricks.

At the fourth stage in the process, the
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bricks
are put
in a drying oven for one or two days. The dried
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bricks
are heated
in a kiln with a moderate temperature (200 to 980 degrees), and high temperature up to 1300 degrees,
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before
spending two to three days in a cooling chamber.
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.
Finally
, the finished
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bricks
are packaged
and delivered on a lorry for delivery.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates different stages in the process of manufacturing bricks from the digging step to delivery.

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