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The diagram illustrates 10 steps of recycling wasted glass bottles.

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The diagram illustrates 10 steps of recycling wasted glass bottles. As is observed, these bottles are required to undergo three significant stages before completely converting into brand new consumable products. Bottles of beer or fizzy drinks, which have been used up, are categorised as the wasted glass bottles. During the first process, these are accumulated to the collection point with the aim of loading a huge haul. Subsequently, these bottles are transported to the factories on the lorries. Throughout the second stage, these bottles are pasteurized carefully with high-pressure before being smashed into small pieces in the factories. In the next step, pieces are burnt in furnace at the temperature ranging from 600C to 800C, which is harsh enough to liquefy the pieces. Once new liquid glass has been generated, it is shaped in special glass moulds. Eventually, after a complicated treatment process, new glass bottles come out. These bottles are then filled up with water or liquids and become completed products, ready for being organized in the stocks of a supermarket.
The diagram illustrates 10 steps of recycling wasted
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glass
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bottles
. As
is observed
, these
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bottles
are required
to undergo three significant stages
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before
completely converting into brand new consumable products.

Bottles of beer or fizzy drinks, which have been
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used
up, are
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categorised
as the wasted
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glass
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bottles
. During the
first
process, these
are accumulated
to the collection point with the aim of loading a huge haul.
Subsequently
, these
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bottles
are transported
to the factories on the lorries.

Throughout the second stage, these
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bottles
are pasteurized
carefully
with high-pressure
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before
being smashed
into
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small
pieces in the factories. In the
next
step, pieces
are burnt
in furnace at the temperature ranging from 600C to 800C, which is harsh
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enough
to liquefy the pieces. Once new liquid
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glass
has
been generated
, it
is shaped
in special
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glass
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moulds
.

Eventually
, after a complicated treatment process, new
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glass
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bottles
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come
out. These
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bottles
are then filled up with water or liquids and become completed products, ready for
being organized
in the stocks of a supermarket.

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates 10 steps of recycling wasted glass bottles.

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