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The charts below show the world spending and population.

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The first pie chart illustrates the expenditure on a global scale while the second chart shows the percentages of people in different continents. Overall, what is clear from the first chart is that the largest proportion of money goes to other services. In the second chart, Asia is the leading continent in terms of percentage of population worldwide, while other areas have much fewer people. Looking at the first chart, 40% of money around the world is spent on other services which is almost twice as much as food (24%). The percentage of budget spending on transport accounts for 18% globally whereas the figures for housing and clothing total up to 12% and 6% respectively. Turning to the second chart, Asia is the number one continent which includes 57% of the world's population. By contrast, Europeans and Americans are considerably fewer than Asians, making up 14% of the sample each. Africa is the third highly populated area where 10% of total population in the world live. Finally, the chart shows that there are 5% of people who live in other continents.
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illustrates the expenditure on a global scale while the second
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the percentages of
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from the
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is that the largest proportion of money goes to
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services. In the second
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, Asia is the leading continent in terms of percentage of population worldwide, while
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areas have much fewer
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Looking at the
first
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, 40% of money around the world
is spent
on
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services which is almost twice as much as food (24%). The percentage of budget spending on transport accounts for 18% globally whereas the figures for housing and clothing total up to 12% and 6%
respectively
.

Turning to the second
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, Asia is the number one continent which includes 57% of the world's population. By contrast, Europeans and Americans are
considerably
fewer than Asians, making up 14% of the sample each. Africa is the third
highly
populated area where 10% of total population in the world
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