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The bar graph below provides information of the types of items sold at a particular newsstand in New York. Summarize the given information by reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below provides information of the types of items sold at a particular newsstand in New York. Summarize the given information by reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. LwnPn
The bar graph below illustrates the percentage of seven different products sold at a newsstand in New York in 2004 and 2009. It is noticeable that only the stationery category remained unchanged in both of the years, while all of the other items experienced a variety of fluctuations. There are also opposite trends amongst paper products categories, namely magazines, cards, and newspaper. Stationery stood at an unfluctuating 12% in 2004 as well as 2009. Sugary products, such as soft drinks and candy, on the other hand, saw a significant rise. Soft drinks and candy percentage roughly doubled in 2009 compared to 2004, increasing to 30% and 20% respectively. Looking at the information in more detail, it can be seen that magazine and newspaper figures mirror each other. In 2009, their percentage both went down to 5%, equalling half of their figures in comparison to 2004. By contrast, cards increased to about 10% in the latest period shown, which doubled its previous figures in 2004.
The bar graph below illustrates the percentage of seven
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products sold at a newsstand in New York in 2004 and 2009. It is noticeable that
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only
the stationery category remained unchanged in both of the years, while
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other items experienced a variety of fluctuations. There are
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opposite trends amongst paper products categories,
namely
magazines, cards, and newspaper. Stationery stood at an
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unfluctuating
12% in 2004
as well
as 2009. Sugary products, such as soft drinks and candy,
on the other hand
,
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saw
a significant rise. Soft drinks and candy percentage roughly doubled in 2009 compared to 2004, increasing to 30% and 20%
respectively
. Looking at the information in more detail, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that magazine and newspaper figures mirror each other. In 2009, their percentage both went down to 5%, equalling half of their figures
in comparison
to 2004. By contrast, cards increased to about 10% in the latest period shown, which doubled its previous figures in 2004.

IELTS academic The bar graph below provides information of the types of items sold at a particular newsstand in New York. Summarize the given information by reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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