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the diagram gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000

The chart give information regarding the number of parcels sent by two main mail services companies; Federal Express and TNT Mail Service from 1920 to 2000. Overall, the parcels delivery by both parties rose steadily from 1920 to 1940, fluctuating around 5000 and 10. 000 respectively. However, FedEx company experienced rapid fell of sales after 1940 with the loss of 13. 000 parcels order make it the lowest of income in 1960. In contrary, TNT then increased steadily from 1940 to 1960. There is a similar pattern of the sales in 1970, which fluctuate for both companies. By contrast, TNT climbed dramatically in the year 1980 leaving FedEx behind by the peak number of 24. 000 orders. By contrast, the fedex were falling consistently from 1940 to 2000. In summary, it seems that FedEx was leading the sales until 1960 but the defeated by the TNT with sudden fluctuate in 1980 to 2000.

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sent
 by two main mail services This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companies
; Federal Express and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnitroglycerin
TNT
 Mail Service from 1920 to 2000. Overall
, the An apostrophe may be missing.parcels'parcel's
parcels
 delivery by both parties rose steadily
 from 1920 to 1940, fluctuating around 5000 and 10. 000 respectively
. However
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company
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make
 it the lowest of income in 1960. In contrary, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnitroglycerin
TNT
 then increased steadily
 from 1940 to 1960.

There is a similar pattern of the sales in 1970, which fluctuate for both This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companies
. By contrast, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnitroglycerin
TNT
 climbed dramatically
 in the year 1980 leaving FedEx behind by the peak number of 24. 000 orders. By contrast, the Did you mean “FedEx” (can also be used as a verb)?FedEx
fedex
 were falling consistently
 from 1940 to 2000.

In summary, it seems that FedEx was leading the sales until 1960 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the defeated by the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnitroglycerin
TNT
 with sudden fluctuate in 1980 to 2000. 