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The diagram explains how sugar is produced from the sugar cane.

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The diagram explains how sugar is produced from the sugar cane. Overall, the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane begins with taking care of sugar cane for more than a year on farm and ends with getting dry and cool in a container. The first step is that sugar is grown in special fields within 18 months and then the process of gathering from the field which is done with combine harvester or by farmers manually. Following this, sugar canes are put in a machine which compresses to form liquid. After that, the ready product is poured into limestone liter in order to remove unwanted substances. In the next stage, juice is warmed up to become a syrup in the evaporator, and then breaking up sugar crystals from syrup. Finally, it is got dry and cold before sugar is ready to sell.
The diagram
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explains
how
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sugar
is produced
from the
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sugar
cane.

Overall
, the manufacturing process for making
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sugar
from
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sugar
cane
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begins
with taking care of
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sugar
cane for more than a year on farm and ends with getting dry and cool in a container.

The
first
step is that
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sugar
is grown
in special fields within 18 months and then the process of gathering from the field which
is done
with combine harvester or by farmers
manually
. Following this,
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sugar
canes
are put
in a machine which compresses to form liquid. After that, the ready product
is poured
into limestone liter in order to remove unwanted substances.

In the
next
stage, juice
is warmed
up to become a syrup in the evaporator, and then breaking up
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sugar
crystals from syrup.
Finally
, it is
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got
dry and
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cold
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before
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sugar
is ready to sell.
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