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The diagram elucidates how chocolate is made and how the fare of chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the pie chart.

The diagram elucidates how chocolate is made and how the fare of chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the pie chart. 6LL8W
The diagram elucidates how chocolate is made and how the fare of chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the pie chart. At the first glance, coca is grinding and waste material go down and other is transfer into coca liquor. Apart from this, coca liquor is separate into two part, industrial choc late and pressing. The material is sent to the industrial chocolates for preparation. The sugar and other ingredients are added into chocolate and it is make a chocolate bar. However, supermarket premium almost one third percent added in the whole chocolate bar on the contrary, farmer par potion is three tenth less than the supermarket fare in chocolate bar. Furthermore, chocolate company and tax figure have only two third percentage difference in the chocolate cost. Finally, the cost of ingredients and overhead are pinnacle point about 37 percent pay involves into the chocolate bar cost
The diagram elucidates how chocolate
is made
and how the fare of chocolate bar
is divided
up among those involved in the pie chart.

At the
first
glance, coca is grinding and waste material go down and other is transfer into coca liquor. Apart from this, coca liquor is separate into two part, industrial choc late and pressing. The material is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to the industrial
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chocolates
for preparation. The sugar and other ingredients are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
into chocolate and it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a chocolate bar.

However
, supermarket premium almost one third percent
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added
in the whole chocolate bar
on the contrary
, farmer par potion is three tenth less than the supermarket fare in chocolate bar.
Furthermore
, chocolate
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company
and tax figure have
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only
two third percentage difference in the chocolate cost.
Finally
, the cost of ingredients and overhead are pinnacle point about 37 percent pay involves into the chocolate bar cost
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IELTS academic The diagram elucidates how chocolate is made and how the fare of chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the pie chart.

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149 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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