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the graph show university graduates in Canada, 1992-2007

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The graph gives information about the figure for people who graduated from Canada's educational establishment between 1992 and 2007. Overall, it can be noted that there was the same trend for the number of university graduates both in male and female.  From 1992 to 1994,  university graduates in Canada rose slightly to approximately 10, 000 individuals in male and 5, 000 people in female.  And then, there was a decrease in the number of woman graduates from about 105, 000 to 100, 000 over the period of two years.  For the male graduates' number, it fell gradually about 10, 000 persons between 1996 and 1998.  In the following period of six years, the figure for female graduates increased sharply to about 40, 000 people.  On the other hand, there was only an insignificant increase from about 75, 000 to 95, 000. It is clear the number of female graduates was many times higher than males.  Although there was the same trend in both sexuals, the figure for males number still lower than females and it only rose about 25, 000 in over the period of 14-year.
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who graduated from Canada's educational establishment between 1992 and 2007.

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university graduates in Canada rose
slightly
to approximately 10, 000 individuals in male and 5, 000 
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 in female.  And then, there was a decrease in the number of woman graduates from about 105, 000 to 100, 000 over the period of two years.  For the male graduates' number, it fell
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 about 10, 000 persons between 1996 and 1998.  In the following period of six years, the figure for female graduates increased
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to about 40, 000
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