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The diagram demonstrates the process of making honey by bees.

The diagram demonstrates the process of making honey by bees. MrLE9

The diagram demonstrates the process of making honey by bees. By and large, there are seven main stages from building the hive to storing honey and ready to be collected and used by humans. To begin with, bees need to build a honeycomb which is also called a hive. The two main components of honeycomb are raw honey and beeswax. Secondly, worker bees leave the hive and go to find a good source of nectar from flowers. They use their proboscis to absorb nectar from flowers and return to their house bees. In the next stage, bees fill the cells inside the hive with nectar so they can really start the honey making process. There is a problem that inside the liquid nectar contains too much water, in this case, bees must work on drying it out. Bees need to fan their wings near the honey to increase the evaporation of water. In the final stage, honey will be stored in the beeswax until it is ready for bees to eat and picked up by humans for manufacturing and consumption.

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