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The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian males and females in 6 diverse age groups about doing healthy activities in 2010.

The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian males and females in 6 diverse age groups about doing healthy activities in 2010. Nlnd0
The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian males and females in 6 diverse age groups about doing healthy activities in 2010. It is noticable that the first age group was 15 to 24, and this teams of mens were more active, than women doing physical activities. However, after the age of 35 females had become the most activier in this exercises. The percentages of males drop gradually, with 39. 5%at the age of 35 to 44, while females were gained 52. 5% doing regular body mechanics in 2010. In addition to, the next age groups males more energetic, with 43. 1%. Although women were peaked at high proportion approximately 53 % at the age of 45 to 54. Moreover, we can see that both genders were becoming lively at the next period. The following duration group was a 55 to 64, t he majority of proportion was established still females, with the 53% of doing everyday tasks. Both genders was a nearly equal doing gymnastic at the last lifetime. To be precise, mens were a 46. 7% and females established 47. 1% percentage of implementing of training.
The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian males and
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age
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groups
about
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doing
healthy activities in 2010.

It is
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noticable
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first
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age
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group
was 15 to 24, and this teams of
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mens
were more active, than women
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doing
physical activities.
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age
of 35
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females
had become the most
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activier
in
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exercises.

The percentages of males drop
gradually
, with 39. 5%at the
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age
of 35 to 44, while
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females
were gained
52. 5%
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doing
regular body mechanics in 2010.
In addition
to, the
next
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age
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groups
males more energetic, with 43. 1%.
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women
were peaked
at high proportion approximately 53 % at the
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age
of 45 to 54.
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, we can
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that both genders were becoming lively at the
next
period.

The following duration
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was a 55 to 64, t
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he majority
of proportion
was established
still
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females
, with the 53% of
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doing
everyday tasks. Both genders
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a
nearly
equal
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gymnastic at the last lifetime. To be precise,
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mens
were a 46. 7% and
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established 47. 1% percentage of implementing of training.
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